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College Essay- Draft 1

            Many people have super heroes, or famous people that they look up to, but not me. The one person I look up to the most in my life is my grandma who I call “Nana”. She is the shining star in my life. One of the most important lessons she taught me was to never take life for granted, and live life to the fullest. I thank her for everything she has done and taught me, because without her life lessons, I would not be the person I am today.      

            She taught me how important it is to be neat and organized all the time. Ever since I was an infant she always taught me how to be clean, neat, and organized. My family would tease me on how I was a little mini- me of nana, because I would clean the house just like her. In the beginning I would despise cleaning up after myself, but after about the hundredth time of hearing her tell me to clean this and that, I found myself doing it on my own. From this habit of being neat and organized since I was a toddler, it has helped me till this day. Being organized has helped me out a lot for school, sports, and everyday life. I know for a fact, that in college you have to always be on the top of things, and keep all your papers in order.

             I look up to my nana because I find her one of the humblest people in the world. For the time I had with her everywhere I went together all she did was take care of the people surrounding her, no matter who they were. I admire her so much for doing so, and I am slowly trying to be just like her. She always told me to help out where it’s needed. I learned that its rude not to help out, either if your at home or at a friends place. So everywhere I go, I ask everyone if they need help doing something when ever or where ever we are. My nana also taught me to never be greedy, and that we should always share. One of the most important things my nana taught me was to do what you love. As soon as I played my first year of club volleyball at the age of 12, I automatically fell in love with the sport. After playing club volleyball for two years, it was time to try out for high school volleyball. When I was trying out for high school volleyball I was very nervous, but the one thing that kept me at a positive attitude was my nana’s words saying “ Never give up, and do what you love.” and that’s exactly what I did. With that positive attitude I made the Moanalua High School JV volleyball team, and now at the time as a sophomore I am on the blue varsity team. From this experience I will never think negative of what I can and cannot do.

            I wish I could’ve thanked her for helping me become the person I am today. She means so much to me that ever since I was a baby, she taught me right from wrong. 

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The two competitive surfers race each other down the massive wave trying to conquer the steep barrel of water. These two professional brave surfers find their balance while riding a 25 foot wave down on the island of O'ahu.

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Coming of Age- 1st Draft

Coming Of Age Essay

            I’m peacefully writing my thank you cards for my birthday presents, while mom is on the side of me watching TV. I hear the TV volume slowly decreasing and she says we are moving houses, and I said “okay” because I knew it was eventually going to happened. Next she told me she was getting married, which made me start to get a little mad, confused, and surprised. I then start asking her questions like “when are you getting married?”, “When did John ask you?”, and “Are you sure you want to get married?”. After hearing about mom going to get married I hear her softly under her breath say she was pregnant. I thought she was joking so I told her to “Shut up” repeatedly when finally she told me she wasn’t joking and I saw her touch her stomach and that was when I freaked out.

            I asked mom “ Are you sure your getting married?” and her response was yes!  I couldn’t get that through my head for the longest time. I was still processing that mom is pregnant. After hearing all the big news that was happening I ran to my room with no further questions and slammed my door behind me. I jumped to lay on my bed and had so many questions running through my head, debating if I wanted to ask them or not. A few minutes later mom came into my room asking me what my problem was and why I stammered off into my room without saying anything. All I could tell to her was that I had nothing to say. And our conversation ended there.

            The following day when she woke me up it wasn’t the same. I could tell she was mad from the tone of her voice. But like a stubborn child I acted like nothing happened until she stopped me while walking out the door to go to school, she said to me “Are you sure you still don’t have anything to talk about?” and as usual my answer was “No”.  I felt like I was in a dream and couldn’t wake up. All I could think about was what my life was going to be like in the future with all these new changes happening.

            Something changed my life even more, which was mom being pregnant. I felt like I was going to be sick to my stomach because I knew my life was going to be very different. I knew I wouldn’t be as spoiled as much or have as much attention as I did before. I would also have to help out more around the house such as wash dishes more often and also not leave my school things all over the place. 9 months later mom had her baby. My sister came on August 4, 2012 and my life is already changing but, its not all that bad. Before I felt like everything was going to change and my life was going to be harder, but it isn’t that bad. I love her to death! She is so adorable, petite, and such a cutie pie.

            In a way I grew up, I had to start taking more responsibility, and mature more. I learned I am no longer the baby of the family, and I have to start helping out around the house more now that there’s a baby around. Everyday is a new day that I slowly get more and more independent to help me in the future and grow up to be a smart, independent women.

Blog Revisions

For this sophomore year blog, I wanted to make it more about me and how I am. I made my blog very bright because these are some of my favorite colors. I changed my Blog name to "My World In My Own Words" because this blog will most likely be having personal essays all about me. I put the picture of the world with the hands because the hands represent me and the world represents the variety of the things I write about.