Allusion Poem Final

I am sociable to many 

and love the big blue sea

curious about the world 

that i have yet to explore

Stubborn to the ones that know me best

Yet I have a hard time listening 

with the mistakes I make 

I learn to become a better person 

I collect treasures from the underwater world

and make different creations with their beauty 

My friends and I enjoy the crisp refreshing salty water

and with my best friends at my side guiding me 

Exploring what the future has to hold 

I take chances in the world 

to follow what i truly want

and what comes from the heart

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Allusion Poem Draft

I live around the ocean wide and blue
Swimming and surfing is what I do
My friends and I just love the sea
And when I swim, I don't have to find a bathroom to pee

Atlantis is the kingdom where I want to be
Fun and joy is what I bring and
With my family and friends at the beach
The ocean always has something for each

Each day is a new adventure for me
Everything is so big and blue in my sea 
WIth my pals at my side
We are always finding a place to slip and slide

I know sometimes I got too far out
And I get scoldings and then I pout
I know I should listen to everyone 
But sometimes I'm having to much fun

The ocean teaches us so very much
Just like in life, I'm learning just a touch 
When I grow up, the ocean still be a big part me
I love the big wide ocean and the big blue sea

1st semester Portfolio conference

Dear mom and dad,

This past semester was a very long and sometimes challenging one. At the same time I enjoyed all of our writing assignments. A lot of the assignments were personal based experiences, which I like to do because I don't care for researching. I am proud of myself for improving on my writing skills because the ending of 9th grade and the beginning of sophomore year I would always get C's on my essays, but now I am getting persistent B's. For me this is an improvement, even though to you it may not. But my next goal is to shoot for A's in the next semester coming up. The one assignment that I was proud of was my "Angry Letter" because to me, I know I'm not the greatest when coming to research. The Angry Letter was one of the few assignments/essays that wasn't off personal experiences. One of the major challenges this semester I had was trying to learn broadcast things, when many of us aren't in broadcast. My next goal I have is to try and adapt more faster and help out more. This is a realistic goal because it's not something I cannot do. I just have to put more effort into doing so. 

1. What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio?
2. What did you like about my porfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on? 
3. Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me? 
4. Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?

Thanks for your time! 

Movie Review- Thin

Polly, Shelly, Brittany, and Alisa are all patients of The Renfrew Center in Coconut Creek, Florida that is a 40- bed residential facility for the treatment of women with eating disorders. Director Lauren Greenfield and Producer R.J Cutler were given the access of going to therapy sessions, mealtimes and daily weight-gains, and their personal relationships with each other and family and staff.

The movie “Thin” was very in depth of what the life of 20-30 year old women with eating disorders are like. I thought this movie was very enjoyable but coming to the end it got more and more dull because it was the same thing happening over and over again. At other times I felt a little disgusted but at the same time a little sad by the way I was seeing some women eating so little and seeing the way they felt about themselves when really they are pretty women that care to much about their appearances. You can buy this 1 hour 42 minute documentary on amazon.com. It played once on HBO for the public to see what some people go through.

If you are starting to have second thoughts about your body, but at the same time still very skinny, I recommend you to watch this because it teaches you how ridiculous of trouble some women go through. So many women go through unnecessary things just to get “their” perfect body image. I learned that you everyone is special in their own way and you shouldn’t change for anyone.

Some improvements I would suggest for this documentary is to not be so long of the same things such as eating, weighing, etc. But overall, I thought this documentary was well put together and very interesting. You learn that many women around the world over react on the way they look and in the end become unhealthy and the opposite of what they should look like. 

Angry Letter Draft

2825 Ala Ilima street

Honolul, HI, 96818

November 13, 2012

Wet’n’Wild Water Park

400 Farrington Highway

Kapolei, Hawaii, 96707

Dear Wet’n’Wild Water Park Administration,

My friends and I have been satisfied customers of Wet’n’Wild for many years now. Your new rides once a year, fun slides, and your very friendly employees keep my friends and I coming back.

However, the day we went we really wanted to ride the Shaka, the Raging River, and the Island Racer all on the same day. But since all of these rides are rotation rides it was hard to ride all of them because there is always a long line from everyone changing lines to ride the ones in progress. The last time I went with my friends to Wet’n’Wild we had to wait in line for around 20 minutes just to ride one ride. With only a limited time at the amazing water park we were disappointed to leave and not being able to ride all the rides wanting to. I understand that sometimes you guys can’t always have all the rides open at the same time, but in that case I would suggest that Wet’n’Wild get more employees so more rides are open the entire time you are open.  

In addition, my friends and I went to your water park 3 times in the same summer and found out some of the rides weren’t open at the time. I get that sometimes we can’t always be pleased with everything, but we had this happened to us multiple times. With that happening I just wanted to bring that to your attention.

Through all of this, your employees at Wet’n’Wild were very polite on the way telling us the rides at the time were unavailable. They all said they were sorry for the inconvenience and that next time they should be ready for us.

I have no objection to your policies of what to offer patron but feel that you should open all of the rides up during the open hours so the people can experience all of the excitement in one day to get their moneys worth.

Sincerely,

Brooke Yoshida

Eating Disorder Draft Essay

Eating disorders are a group of serious conditions in which you're so preoccupied with food and weight that you can often focus on little else. There is no single cause of an eating disorder, but the concern about their weight and body images are factors of why they get this disorder. Another cause from this disorder is having cultural or family pressures that get to them that they are to fat or eating too much. Binging, Anorexia, and Bulimia are all types of eating disorders that are very serious conditions, but also you have a choice of having it or not.

You are given the choice of having an eating disorder. No one forces you to have it, but at the same time its what you want to do with your life. Eating disorders develop over time, meaning that if they have acknowledged them starting to have this disorder, they could have a choice of trying to stop themselves from making it worst. Another reason why you have an eating disorder is from emotional or mental issues. People with eating disorders might have an unreasonable and unreal expectation on how they should look.

Having an eating disorder is very serious, but not everyone thinks it is. People that have this disorder sometimes don’t know how important it is to have this disorder. This disorder has the highest mortality rate of any mental illness. People with this disorder need to be more serious if they have it. Only 1 in 10 men and women with eating disorders received treatment. Not many people thing that this disorder is a serious problem, but honestly this disorder is 12 times higher than the death rate associated with all causes of death for females 15-24 years old. 81% of kids are caring about what they look like at a very young age of 10.

Lot’s of people around the world have an eating disorder, but not many people know it. Right here in the United States alone, has up to 24 million Americans are affected this eating disorder. Some of the ways you can tell that you have an eating disorder is by losing your hair, secretive eating, to cold to fast, etc. Over one-half of teenage girls and nearly one- third boys use of unhealthy weight control behaviors. Some of the unhealthy weight control behaviors boys and girls do in order to watch their weights is by skipping meals, so they wouldn’t think they could get fat.

 Having an eating disorder is when you have Binging, Anorexia, and Bulimia, which are all very serious disorders that you choose to have or not to have. Millions of people around the world have this disorder and many of them don’t even know it. Although this disorder is by choice, we should be more careful of on the things we choose to do, such as not eating and making your self-purge. Once you know that you are starting to have different eating habits, you should ask your doctor about it or go online to search about it. Overall, we should all make the right decisions on eating, and not care what other people think about the way you look because everyone is special in their own way.