Allusion Graphic Final

Allusion Poem Final

I am sociable to many 

and love the big blue sea

curious about the world 

that i have yet to explore

Stubborn to the ones that know me best

Yet I have a hard time listening 

with the mistakes I make 

I learn to become a better person 

I collect treasures from the underwater world

and make different creations with their beauty 

My friends and I enjoy the crisp refreshing salty water

and with my best friends at my side guiding me 

Exploring what the future has to hold 

I take chances in the world 

to follow what i truly want

and what comes from the heart

Allusion Graphic draft

Allusion Poem Draft

I live around the ocean wide and blue
Swimming and surfing is what I do
My friends and I just love the sea
And when I swim, I don't have to find a bathroom to pee

Atlantis is the kingdom where I want to be
Fun and joy is what I bring and
With my family and friends at the beach
The ocean always has something for each

Each day is a new adventure for me
Everything is so big and blue in my sea 
WIth my pals at my side
We are always finding a place to slip and slide

I know sometimes I got too far out
And I get scoldings and then I pout
I know I should listen to everyone 
But sometimes I'm having to much fun

The ocean teaches us so very much
Just like in life, I'm learning just a touch 
When I grow up, the ocean still be a big part me
I love the big wide ocean and the big blue sea

1st semester Portfolio conference

Dear mom and dad,

This past semester was a very long and sometimes challenging one. At the same time I enjoyed all of our writing assignments. A lot of the assignments were personal based experiences, which I like to do because I don't care for researching. I am proud of myself for improving on my writing skills because the ending of 9th grade and the beginning of sophomore year I would always get C's on my essays, but now I am getting persistent B's. For me this is an improvement, even though to you it may not. But my next goal is to shoot for A's in the next semester coming up. The one assignment that I was proud of was my "Angry Letter" because to me, I know I'm not the greatest when coming to research. The Angry Letter was one of the few assignments/essays that wasn't off personal experiences. One of the major challenges this semester I had was trying to learn broadcast things, when many of us aren't in broadcast. My next goal I have is to try and adapt more faster and help out more. This is a realistic goal because it's not something I cannot do. I just have to put more effort into doing so. 

1. What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio?
2. What did you like about my porfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on? 
3. Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me? 
4. Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?

Thanks for your time! 

Movie Review- Thin

Polly, Shelly, Brittany, and Alisa are all patients of The Renfrew Center in Coconut Creek, Florida that is a 40- bed residential facility for the treatment of women with eating disorders. Director Lauren Greenfield and Producer R.J Cutler were given the access of going to therapy sessions, mealtimes and daily weight-gains, and their personal relationships with each other and family and staff.

The movie “Thin” was very in depth of what the life of 20-30 year old women with eating disorders are like. I thought this movie was very enjoyable but coming to the end it got more and more dull because it was the same thing happening over and over again. At other times I felt a little disgusted but at the same time a little sad by the way I was seeing some women eating so little and seeing the way they felt about themselves when really they are pretty women that care to much about their appearances. You can buy this 1 hour 42 minute documentary on amazon.com. It played once on HBO for the public to see what some people go through.

If you are starting to have second thoughts about your body, but at the same time still very skinny, I recommend you to watch this because it teaches you how ridiculous of trouble some women go through. So many women go through unnecessary things just to get “their” perfect body image. I learned that you everyone is special in their own way and you shouldn’t change for anyone.

Some improvements I would suggest for this documentary is to not be so long of the same things such as eating, weighing, etc. But overall, I thought this documentary was well put together and very interesting. You learn that many women around the world over react on the way they look and in the end become unhealthy and the opposite of what they should look like. 

Angry Letter Draft

2825 Ala Ilima street

Honolul, HI, 96818

November 13, 2012

Wet’n’Wild Water Park

400 Farrington Highway

Kapolei, Hawaii, 96707

Dear Wet’n’Wild Water Park Administration,

My friends and I have been satisfied customers of Wet’n’Wild for many years now. Your new rides once a year, fun slides, and your very friendly employees keep my friends and I coming back.

However, the day we went we really wanted to ride the Shaka, the Raging River, and the Island Racer all on the same day. But since all of these rides are rotation rides it was hard to ride all of them because there is always a long line from everyone changing lines to ride the ones in progress. The last time I went with my friends to Wet’n’Wild we had to wait in line for around 20 minutes just to ride one ride. With only a limited time at the amazing water park we were disappointed to leave and not being able to ride all the rides wanting to. I understand that sometimes you guys can’t always have all the rides open at the same time, but in that case I would suggest that Wet’n’Wild get more employees so more rides are open the entire time you are open.  

In addition, my friends and I went to your water park 3 times in the same summer and found out some of the rides weren’t open at the time. I get that sometimes we can’t always be pleased with everything, but we had this happened to us multiple times. With that happening I just wanted to bring that to your attention.

Through all of this, your employees at Wet’n’Wild were very polite on the way telling us the rides at the time were unavailable. They all said they were sorry for the inconvenience and that next time they should be ready for us.

I have no objection to your policies of what to offer patron but feel that you should open all of the rides up during the open hours so the people can experience all of the excitement in one day to get their moneys worth.

Sincerely,

Brooke Yoshida